STATUS: Heading out early to meet with tax accountant.
What’s playing on the XM or iPod right now? THE SWEETEST TABOO by Sade
Sara was in the office today so we put our heads together on a couple of other tidbits of feedback we gleaned from the all the pitch critiques we did.
Here are a couple of other culprits we discovered while critiquing that would have made us pass had we not being doing that editorial input.
1) Too much emphasis on the world building without giving equal weight or emphasis to the story and the characters in it.
2) Mechanics of the writing was unpolished—as in there were syntax and obvious grammar errors within the pitch itself.
3) Vague descriptions such as: “suddenly a new discovery threatens everything INSERT CHARACTER NAME holds dear.” The problem is that such grand but vague statements don’t tell the reader anything. It’s like saying “this restaurant serves food.”
4) We couldn’t understand the world because the description was unclear. (By the way, we debated whether this fits under “convoluted plot” of yesterday’s entry but we don’t think so it. It feels separate.) You have to choose the right details about your world in the pitch because you can’t explain everything. You can only highlight an element or two that will stand out as unique about the world.
5) Writers who made up a name for a creature or an element but didn’t include any explanation of what it was in the pitch so it didn’t have context. This leads to confusion.
That’s all she wrote folks.fantasy, middle grade, science fiction, young adult